Talk:Christopher Tolkien

GA Review

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Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 12:55, 3 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: MSincccc (talk · contribs) 15:07, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:30, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

@Chiswick Chap You are welcome. Hopefully we can wrap this up in time without compromising with quality. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 15:59, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

Comments

1 It is reasonably well written.

a (prose, spelling, and grammar):

• Short description could be modified to include (1924-2020) as per WP:SDDATES.

  Added.

• Could his full name at the time of birth be mentioned here-=]Tolkien was born in Leeds, England. Furthermore, his birth date could be mentioned here before his place of birth for clarity and in a way similar to most articles.
  • Done.
• Wasn't his full name at the time of birth Christopher John Reuel Tolkien?
  • We don't use that except at the top, just once, which we've done already.

• He won a place to study English at Trinity College, Oxford, still aged 17, but after a year and a half there he received his call-up papers for military service. The "he" could be replaced here with his surname/name (as is preferable to you) so as to start off the paragraph mentioning him. Thereafter, you may use "he" when its clearly that he, Tolkien, is being referred to.
  • Done.
• The prose could be finer if the above suggestion could be implemented throughout the article. I can still spot words like "his", "he",etc. in the opening sentence of the article.
  • I've edited another; please feel free to make this minor tweak as it all looks fine to me already.

• In 2016 Christopher won a Bodley Medal,... Omitted the comma given the article is in British English.
  • Done.

• Later, He followed in his father's footsteps, becoming a lecturer and tutor in English language at New College, Oxford in 1963. Please fix the typo in this sentence.
  • Done.

b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

• Can reference number 1 be moved to the article body to comply with MOS:LEAD?
  • Done.

• He also drew the original maps for his father's epic high fantasy novel The Lord of the Rings. Introduced The Lord of the Rings.

Removed gloss.

2 It is factually accurate and verifiable.

a (references):

• Some of the references need to be formatted in the standard form. Example- references 29 and 30.
  • Done, but it's not a GA requirement.
    • It might not be a requirement here but only beneficial to make them now lest they end up at FAC in the future.
      • Whatever, but that's someone else's requirement for some other event at some unspecified future time, and should not be here.
      • Do you prefer a leaner review given that this is for a GA? In that case, I will have to go out of my usual way of reviewing articles.
        • No, standard weight is just fine.

b (citations to reliable sources):

c (OR):

d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3 It is broad in its coverage.

a (major aspects):

b (focused):

4 It follows the neutral point of view policy.

a Fair representation without bias:

5 It is stable.

a No edit wars, etc.:

6 It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):

b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

• Is it possible to trim the image captions?

  Lead image: very short already.

  Legendarium (navigable template): no, since the caption explains what the work is, and the text is shared with each of the legendarium articles.

  Monsters & Critics: it's brief as it is.

  History of Middle-earth: no, as the caption has to make 2 points, that it's analogous to the M&C approach just presented as an image, and that the framing includes a figure of the editor himself.