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Former good article nomineeLaysan was a Geography and places good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
April 8, 2008Good article nomineeNot listed

Name

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I don't know whether this should be called Laysan Island instead. Web pages that I've seen seem to use either name interchangeably.

Reef

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I note that Reef has a link to the currently nonexistent article Fringing reef. When that gets written, this article should probably link to there instead of to Reef. For now, linking to Reef is the most informative option. Triskaideka 20:44, 1 Sep 2004 (UTC)

GA review

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I'm afraid that this article isn't close to GA yet.

  1. The introduction does not come close to summarising the article
  2. Much is unreferenced, including most of the geology section
  3. References are a mess. Is Sinclair a ref or external link? - shouldn't be both Why are there footnote links in the reference section instead of incorporating the url? footnoteplacement in text doesn't always follow punctuation
  4. lack of clarity - Species section claims two mammals and a few birds - presumably no invertebrates, plants or bacteria?
  5. birds just a list - which breed and which are visitors?
  6. whole Ancient Hawaiian section is based on a newspaper article, needs a proper ref
  7. images, although good, correctly licensed and appropriate, are just dumped in a line. Try to integrate with appropriate sections, reducing size if necessary,
  8. article title shouldn't appear in headings (MOS)
  9. coordinates just an afterthought, why not integrate with the maps
  10. plenty of copy editing to do eg Pritchardia should be italicised, geology gives only imperial measurements

Sorry if this seems pretty negative, but there's a lot to be done. let me know if there's anything above that's unclear. Jimfbleak (talk) 15:24, 7 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sure thing. I was mainly interested in finding out exactly what the article did need for GA, so thank you. SeanMD80talk | contribs 01:50, 8 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Max Schlemmer

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The article takes an apologist's attitude toward Max Schlemmer, whose actions single-handedly caused the extinction of many native species of plants and birds. This is a problem of neutrality. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 140.180.188.137 (talk) 18:03, 24 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Assessment comment

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The comment(s) below were originally left at Talk:Laysan/Comments, and are posted here for posterity. Following several discussions in past years, these subpages are now deprecated. The comments may be irrelevant or outdated; if so, please feel free to remove this section.

Well, I did all that I listed, so B-Class finally! Not sure what else to add, but I'll be back with more specificity and to improve the cohesiveness of the prose.

Last edited at 02:59, 24 March 2008 (UTC). Substituted at 21:44, 29 April 2016 (UTC)

Inundated with what?

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Quote, "A U.S. Geological Survey study found that Laysan, Midway Atoll, and Pacific islands like them could become inundated and unfit to live on during this century.[2][3]"

Inundated with what? This is likely to confuse the average person. TonyMorris68 (talk) 18:39, 11 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]